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We have been learning about 'The Red Beast' in class and about metaphors. So we put them together and look what we can do...
We have been learning about 'The Red Beast' in class and about metaphors. So we put them together and look what we can do...
Smashing feet hitting the ground
like I was running.
Big, loud voices like somebody was screaming
Out pops the beast
Kicking
Spitting
Trying to get his own way
Smash
Crash
Throwing things across the ground.
By GonMat
The heat
travels through your body
slowly and slowly
it gets to the top.
You turn red
suddenly you explode with fire
bursting out of your red steaming body
You sting people
You scream and spit at them
Finally your RED BEAST
is AWAKENED
by MukAah
A volcano squeezes
its fists a tight body of fire inside
can’t wait to explode
“caboooom”.
Fire bursting out
in the beautiful world.
People screaming
Volcano laughing
“ha ha ha”.
By TepMou
The Devil
rising from its lair
raging
his flames across his face
Growing curious of what's around him
SMASH
CRASH
KICKING
YELLING
"untamed?"
Spreading
Swinging his hands
unaware of what he is doing
Destroying everything in his path
his flames burn down to room
getting darker
more silent
flames sinking
into the ground
the Devil is now sleeping
for not.
By MatEve
ANGER
It travels through your body as fast as it can go
Faster faster beating hard, until
the lid flips
the volcano erupts
lava come flying out.
The Red Beast chaarges out and uses its mouth and its arms
for slapping, hitting, screaming and swearing
Until the Red best is trapped and has calmed down.
by YouMic
travels through your body
slowly and slowly
it gets to the top.
You turn red
suddenly you explode with fire
bursting out of your red steaming body
You sting people
You scream and spit at them
Finally your RED BEAST
is AWAKENED
by MukAah
You know that feeling
You're a bomb
ready to go off
you're just about to blow
something happens
you're a gonna
You get louder and louder
you're the loudest you have ever been
you reach the point
where you can't get any louder.
Suddenly...
screaming
hitting
kicking
spitting
Pure silence.
Everything pauses.
by TaiSat
its fists a tight body of fire inside
can’t wait to explode
“caboooom”.
Fire bursting out
in the beautiful world.
People screaming
Volcano laughing
“ha ha ha”.
By TepMou
The best has come
Arisen from his slumber.
Hurting, scaring everyone in his path
All he sees is darkness,
All he feels is rage.
His eyes and ears squeeze into ants
His mouth a hurtful giant.
A set off bomb.
a missile he explodes.
The beast is gone.
by OveJac
A bear can
get angry and can stop with bubble wrap and a drink
It destroys
everything and it has a loud noisy sound.
It can be
grumpy like hurt people
and it has
small eyes, small ears and a big mouth.
It can be a
volcano, it's evil and hot and it says "hahahaha"
It can ruin a
house and hurt people.
by CheAli
rising from its lair
raging
his flames across his face
Growing curious of what's around him
SMASH
CRASH
KICKING
YELLING
"untamed?"
Spreading
Swinging his hands
unaware of what he is doing
Destroying everything in his path
his flames burn down to room
getting darker
more silent
flames sinking
into the ground
the Devil is now sleeping
for not.
By MatEve
The Devil rising from
its home land...
The Nether.
Looking for pain to feed on,
and...
Rage bleeding with in his head.
Snapping furiously at its terrified victims,
eyes ripping out of their sockets.
Enough energy to power the earth.
All happens so swiftly...
The Devil falls into a deep sleep
Until is awakes...
Again.
by FraOll
The
vampire has awakened
he
is ready to bite
his
big red eys are coloured like blood
scary
sounds fill the room
Roar
Grrr
I
dont know what to do
my
heart pumping
as
he gets closer closer
he
starts to creep
crawl
I
hear footsteps
It's
coming
Closer
closer
Boo!
by
AshSar
It travels through your body as fast as it can go
Faster faster beating hard, until
the lid flips
the volcano erupts
lava come flying out.
The Red Beast chaarges out and uses its mouth and its arms
for slapping, hitting, screaming and swearing
Until the Red best is trapped and has calmed down.
by YouMic
Anger
is like a snake that bites people.
Snakes
grow bigger.
People
are scared of snakes
When
a snake bites you, the snakes thinks it is being funny
But
for people, they think that it is not funny.
by
KatVit
Hello my name is Owen, I am a student from Melville Intermediate School in Hamilton, but I used to be a student in Miss T's class in Glenview Primary School.
ReplyDeleteI liked the poems. They had nice. I have no idea why they were nice because they were about anger.
Owen, Room Five, Melville Intermediate, Hamilton. melvilleroom8.blogspot.com
Hi there :)
ReplyDeleteMy Name is Elizabeth, Mrs T might remeber me, I was like her favourite student in year 4 at Glenview School. :P
Your anger poems are really good. There a lot of descriptive words and it definetly describs anger very well. :)
Well done room 4
Elizabeth
Room 5
Melville Intermediate School
Melville, Hamilton.
melvilleroom8.blogspot.com
Fantastic, loved reading these! Great work room 4
ReplyDeleteWell done Room 4. You have captured that boiling feeling well.
ReplyDeleteWow room 4 your good at this well done
ReplyDeletenice cool fantastic awesome :)
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